Hardcopy of your Midterm Reflection is due again!


  • Remember that in order to be compliant with your TSI requirements you need to make your visits to the Writing Center. Research shows that multiple visits to the WC are very beneficial for your grade.

Today we are going to work with the idea of Revision

Peer Review: (HOCs) and Lower Order Concerns (LOCs)

When you go to the Writing Center, you might hear the terms, higher order concerns and lower order concerns. Think of HOCs as the basic foundation of your paper. Of course, you want to build a strong foundation for your paper in order to get your ideas, points, and message to your readers. Therefore, HOCs are very important. The 5 terms listed below are what you use to build a solid foundation for your paper. Our peer review today is going to focus on HOCs and making certain that everyone is following the assignment instructions.

Higher Order Concerns

  • Thesis or Focus
  • Audience
  • Purpose
  • Organization
  • Development

Examples of differing degrees of development in paragraphs of reflective writing: the art of reflective writing

Lower Order Concerns

Lower order concerns are more generally sentence-level concerns that deal with grammar, punctuation, spelling, sentence structure, and usage. Today, we are going to focus on looking for some common problems at the sentence-level: the run-on, the comma splice, and the fragment!

Guidelines for Peer Reviewers

  • As with any kind of purpose driven communication, you want to specific and direct in your comments. In other words, the writer needs to have a good understanding of your intent and focus of comment. In a nutshell, avoid generic comments: be precise and specific.
  • Handle with care! By this I mean, be certain to be respectful in your commenting language and be kind. You must negotiate a balance between being cheerleader and a critic. Being thoughtful and engaged in the process will help make for a successful peer review.
  • Today, we are peer reviewing with 2 foci: (HOCs) and (LOCs)
    • Peer Review Step 1: Thesis | Underline the Thesis! Remember that the assignment instructions asked for 2 sentences for the thesis.
      • Here is a sample of a thesis:
      • In this midterm reflection for Professor Burnett’s class, I examine a couple of difficulties I encountered with reading and writing at the college level and I discuss how I handled these situations. Reflecting on these difficulties, I have learned how important the quality of perseverance is to be successful in the college setting.

Key Idea for Introduction --It has a strong thesis.

  • Did the thesis do its job of providing a the reader with a very specific "road map" for the essay so that the reader has a very good understanding of what the paper is going to be about? Offer some comments --praise or concerns.

Key Idea for Organization -- Each paragraph is organized around one main idea.

  • Peer Review Step 2: Organization |Look at the 4 body paragraphs. Underline the topic sentences. Is each paragraph organized around one main point? Offer some comments --praise or concerns.

Key Idea for Development - Be Specific and Detailed

  • Peer Review Step 3: Development |Take another look at the body paragraphs. Are the paragraphs well-developed with supporting sentences that have details, examples, and explanations. Offer some comments --praise or concerns.

Homework --Work on Revising your Reflections. On Thursday, bring in a revised version of your essay for Peer Review Round Two - Lower Order Concerns!