First Draft (It has 150 words)

Stress can be a serious problem for college students with long-lasting negative effects if it not addressed (Crandall, Steward, & Warf, 2016). Piotrowski (2016) notes that stress can cause a host of problems: increasing difficulties in daily life, impeding recovery from mental and physical issues, and weakening the body’s ability to fight disease. The purpose of this study was to determine if implementing a stress management plan improved students’ sense of well-being with regards to Maslow’s hierarchy of needs. A group of 5 students implemented a stress management plan over a two-week period requiring them to identify and treat stressors in their daily lives with a variety of stress management techniques and to evaluate how those stressors and techniques impinged on the different levels of Maslow’s Hierarchy of Needs in a daily journal. Data from the journal was analyzed with qualitative methods. Preliminary results indicate that students benefit by managing stress.

Peer Review Feedback

My peer reviewer gave me the following advice:

  1. Begin with a strong, explicit statement about purpose --- The purpose of this proposal is .....
  2. Follow with 2 to 3 sentences of background information. This is where you cite academic sources from your literature review, using APA.
  3. Then add a sentence or so about the "so what" -- So what statements are about significance. Why this research or subject is important!
  4. Concluding statement comments on the findings of the study.
  5. Make certain to include a list of references at the end for sources cited in the proposal, using APA.

She also said that I could cut out the portion I have bolded because it was not necessary!

Revision and the Second Draft (It has 140 words!)

The purpose of this proposal is to present the results of a qualitative study done to determine if implementing a stress management plan improved students’ sense of well-being with regards to Maslow’s hierarchy of needs. Stress can be a serious problem for college students with long-lasting negative effects if it not addressed (Crandall, Steward, & Warf, 2016). Piotrowski (2016) notes that stress can cause a host of problems: increasing difficulties in daily life, impeding recovery from mental and physical issues, and weakening the body’s ability to fight disease. Learning how to manage stress is an important part of living a healthy, productive life and is necessary for TAMUCC students who are juggling multiple stressors associated with finances, academic progress, work, social involvement and family concerns as young adults and scholars. Study results indicate that students benefit significantly by managing stress.

References

Crandall, K. J. J., Steward, K., & Warf, T. (2016). A mobile app for reducing perceived stress in college students. American Journal of Health Studies,30(2), 68-73. Retrieved from http://va-ajhs.com/

Piotrowski, N. P. (2016). Stress reduction. Magill’s Medical Guide (Online Edition). Retrieved from http://eds.b.ebscohost.com.manowar.tamucc.edu/eds/detail/detail?sid=4e8718f7-c0d0-4dfa-ba32-3cb95fdd3f41%40sessionmgr104&vid=6&hid=121&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWRzLWxpdmUmc2NvcGU9c2l0ZQ%3d%3d#