Your Writing

Does this writer have a good signal phrase?

Is the source correctly cited? Remember that it is a primary source?

Adding to his credibility with the folks of Jamestown, Berkeley states, “I have lived amongst you four and thirty years as uncorrupt and diligent as ever [a] governor was” (Hollitz 32).

Has this source been properly cited?

One quote that really states Bacons purpose would be “Now let us compare these things together and see what sponges have sucked up the public treasure and whether it hath not been privately contrived away by unworthy favorites and juggling parasites whose tottering fortunes have been repaired and supported at the public charge”. I think this quote really represents his reasoning for writing this because it essentially overviews everything he goes over, while being vague enough without giving anything away, but is capable of giving a general understanding of what is being presented.

The author uses pathos when describing the events that have occurred. For example, “near 300 Christian persons barbarously murdered by the Indians” (Hollitz 32). This is to appeal the reader’s emotions and feel grievance for his fellow men who have died.

Okay What I am noticing is that many of you are not citing your quoted material properly or using signal phrasing!

I am going to do a REVISION on the last quote.

  • The author uses pathos when describing the events that have occurred.

Revise to be more specific

  • Bacon uses pathos and logos when describing the problems with the Indians.
  • For example, “near 300 Christian persons barbarously murdered by the Indians” (Hollitz 32). This is to appeal the reader’s emotions and feel grievance for his fellow men who have died.

Revise to use a signal phrase and to cite it correctly.

  • For example, Bacon points out, "near 300 Christian persons [were] barbarously murdered by the Indians" (qtd. in Hollitz 32). Here, Bacon appeals to his readers' emotions and feelings of grievance for their fellow men who have died from Indian attacks. He also employs logic by naming the exact number of men who have died. This makes his argument stronger because it helps his audience understand the scope of the problem with the indians.

For example, “near 300 Christian persons barbarously murdered by the Indians” (Hollitz 32). This is to appeal the reader’s emotions and feel grievance for his fellow men who have died.