For middle versions / drafts...

When you are relatively sure you have all the parts of your piece on the page and in an arrangement that seems effective, you focus on the various "parts" of the piece of writing, and move onto the "middle version" draft response.

Read your groupmates’ work and respond to these prompts. When you comment, ensure that the writer knows specifically the sections of her or his draft that is the focus of your comment. Ensure that your comment / response helps the writer understand “why” you make the comment; you can do this most easily by adding “because" to your response. In other words, if you don’t think a section is clear, say it isn’t clear and then tell why (because . . . .).

  1. Consider readers’ expectations when they first receive / see this document. Or consider the opening chunk of this piece. Or consider the larger purpose that this piece is attempting to accomplish.
    • What do you anticipate in terms of an organization, or in terms of “first this, then that, then . . . “?
    • What do you expect to follow from that opening?
    • How would you outline this draft before you read it, or if you only had the opening?
    • Where does the writer not meet your expectations? Or where does this draft not follow the outline you expected? How? Why?
  2. Focus on specific paragraphs or chunks of content or sections of the draft. Consider the options the writer has for developing individual “specialized” paragraphs or discrete chunks of the draft; and consider the ways those chunks / paragraphs fit within the larger overall structure or “organizational pattern.”
    • Examine each separate paragraph or information chunk (discourse bloc). How else could the writer arrange that information? **Examine each paragraph or chunk of information. How is it connected to the writer's larger purpose? How is it connected to the paragraph / chunk before? After? How could the writer make the connections clearer? How could the writer reconsider arrangement to help with more effective connections among paragraphs / chunks?
    • Examine each paragraph. Where could the writer split the paragraph into 2 or more? Why? Where could the writer combine paragraphs? Why?
  3. Comment on ways that the writer might use headings, sub-headings, text boxes, or other sorts of visual cues to help readers understand the organization and the kinds of content being presented.
  4. Where relevant, examine each use of information from other sources. Help the writer identify places where she or he could integrate more effectively, attribute more clearly and effectively, document more accurately. Confirm direct quotes? paraphrases? summaries?
  5. Where relevant, examine the writer's list or references / works cited / bibliography. Comment on the credibility of the various sources? Comment on apparent gaps in research? Comment on relevance and timeliness of research?